Hello,
I don't know if further developing this is something you're interested in, but I'm on my second run through and I have some observations.
First, I'm enjoying it. I'm choosing to learn what the beads do as I play, and that's a fun thing to be doing.
My first time through, I got let out after two draws. This time, I've already completed the third, and I'm still locked up! I hadn't realized how lucky I was the first time through, but I'm planning on sticking it out and I got to learn two of the things one of the beads does. I have discovered the work of Tessa Fowler and Demi Scott and they are helping me through this difficult time. I'm also very glad I'm playing on noobie. I'd hate to think how long I'd be in here if I'd chosen a more difficult settings. It's almost like the whole thing is rigged against me!
I have noticed that at one point, it was announced that ten of my white beads were being taken away and in actuality 20 were. I almost "fixed" that in the script, but it seemed against the spirit of the game. I would ask, though, was that a programming error or is it an expression of her right to "modify the contents of the bag in any way for any reason" as outlined in the contract? I figured that as any ambiguity in the contract, she gets to resolve meant that I just needed to live with it.
If you're still looking for ideas, here are some:
There should be a Safeword option that stops all clocks and allows consiquence-free removal of the device. The idea being that if you need it off for a medical appointment, to enter a secure building or something's wrong down there, you should just be able to just take it off. When you come back, there would be two options, Resume, where she picks up where you left off and Quit, where the game just ends.
If you're going to do punishments that don't involve taking good beads away, allow the player to buy out of it with extra time until the next draw.
Also, if you ever do tasks, and that would be fun, there should be a LOT of them. A few handfuls are going to be dull very quickly so go for high double digits or something in the hunndreds. The old Jewell script and Earn Your Orgasm have a lot of ideas that could be modified, but I'd leave off those that require an additional kink, such as urine-drinking, public exposure etcetera. So they should be vetted for that. You should not have to endanger your work, your relationships, your social standing etc. They also have to be doable on a budget and alone. You'll also need to make sure that tasks that require things are things the person has and program to check if someone has certain things.
Also, you can't control when she is approached so you can structure the task in a "During the next 20 hours" sort of way and have the task given each time a draw ends in not being released. Things like "Do not wear underwear for the next 20 hours" or "Wear panties for the next 20 hours" or "Be naked when both home and alone for the next 20 hours" or "Watch at least one hour of porn within the next 20 hours" or "Do not eat for the next 9 (or 12 or 6 or whatever) hours unless you must for medical reasons" or "Within the next 20 hours, take a cold shower" or "Within the next 20 hours, wear a hood or pillow case for 20 minutes (or however long)". You'll have to decide if there's a timeout for a task once set and how long it should be for.
I've been thinking of chastity-specific tasks, and here's what I've come up with:
[*] Within the next 20 hours, stroke, caress or otherwise fondle your cage for at least 15 minutes.
[*] Tie a ribbon around your cage (buy one if you have to). Do not remove it for the next 20 hours. Bragging points if your can tie it with a bow tie and extra bragging points if it's a black ribbon as well.
[*] Within the next 20 hours, take a paper plate (buy some if you have to) and cut a hole in it for your cage. Draw a face on it with your cage as the nose. The expression on the face should reflect your cock's feelings about being locked up at this moment.
And there should be some innoculous ones such as:
[*] Within the next 20 hours, take a half-hour walk. I does not matter where you choose to walk or hike or whatever and if the weather is no good for walking, you must still do it. Any time spent sitting in a cafe, restoraunt on a bench or other public accommodation does not count towards the 30 minutes.
[*] Within the next 20 hours, spend at least two hours reading a book. Pick one that you feel will interest you. Change books if you must.
[*] Within the next 20 hours, call a friend or loved one. I'm sure they want to hear from you.
Anyway, those are my thoughts. It's a good script overall.