I was hoping some other script writers could quickly skim through this incomplete draft (about 70% finished) of my first script and post any feedback or advice on it that they may have, as I'm not completely satisfied with the dialogue and/or flow as yet but cant put my finger on whats missing/off about it, and I'm still gettting to grips with .groovy.

The idea of my script is that you choose a celebrity to be your mistress and go from there. I'v made the script as flexible as possible so that any celebrity can be used as long as you have a small set of images of them, preferably in two different outfits, as well as a few dressed as a character or persona that you find especially sexy.

I'v included a sample/example set of Jeri Ryan/Seven of Nine (from Star Trek: Voyager), that I used as a base while creating the script.

Any feedback would be appreciated before I finish up and publish it proper.

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I like the concept. Looking forward to seeing it finished